Prepared by: Rhéal Nadeau
Posted on: Sun, 22 Jul 2001
Reposted on: Sun, 10 Aug 2003
Reposted on: Sun, 13 Mar 2005
A key element of story telling is
conflict. In any story, there has
to
be a goal, and something blocking that goal - hence, conflict.
There are several types of conflict. This
exercise deals with
"person
vs nature".
Literature provides many examples of this
type of conflict. Moby
Dick
and Robinson Crusoe are classic examples. More recently, books like The
Eiger Sanction and A Perfect Storm have included conflict against
nature. Nature, in those books, takes many forms: a whale, a desert
island, a mountain, a storm at sea. The protagonist may need to fight
off dinosaurs, as in Jurassic Park, or learn to find the necessities of
life, as in Robinson Crusoe.
(Note that one of the examples above is
non-fiction - these
principles
don't apply to fiction alone.)
Of course, those works also included other
types of conflicts; in
fact,
in current literature a conflict against nature is often used to
reflect
or illustrate an internal "person vs self" conflict. Even so, of
course, the external conflict, and the corresponding risks, must be
real, and must be dealt with in the real world. (The people presented
in A Perfect Storm were at sea because of various financial and
personal
pressures, but once that storm hit, they had to deal with that -
finances and personal issues became secondary issues at that point. The
*goal* of those individuals was bringing in a good catch of fish to
make
up for a poor season. The storm was the obstacle in their way. The
*conflict* lies in the conjunction of goal and obstacle. Of course, at
a certain point the goal changes to something more important: basic
survival - but it was the goal of bringing in the fish that led to the
conflict.)
So the exercise: in 300 words or less,
present a character in
conflict
with nature. (Other forms of conflict may be present.) Remember to
show us how the character got into this situation (what goal was being
pursued?) In dealing with nature, remember also to involve the senses -
if your character is caught in a storm, make us *feel* and *hear* that
wind!
It is not necessary to resolve the
conflict within the submissions;
the
important thing is creating the conflict.
Rhéal Nadeau's wrap-up
Posted on: Mon, 30 Jul 2001
Another busy week on this list - 19
submissions and 108 critiques.
We saw all forms of conflicts with nature:
weather, geography,
animals.
We saw people willingly take a risk; people forced into action, people
caught by surprise. There were phobias, and recklessness.
It obviously was a challenge to fully
involve the senses, a
secondary
aspect of this exercise. I would comment that going from an abstract
concept to an effective scene is a challenge for most of us. The key, I
think, is learning to visualize the scene. It's one thing, for example,
to have a hiker fall into a pit. It's another to put oneself in that
hiker's position - to feel the injuries from the fall, to touch the
stone wall, with no handholds to allow climbing out, to sense the
humidity and the heat or the cold, to see the light dimming as the sun
sets, while strange sounds rustle about. (See the difference in effect
between the last two sentences?)
As well, many submissions saw other
conflicts, conflicts against
self or against others. Sometimes, the other conflict was stronger,
and the cause of the encounter with nature (even negatively, in
the need to get away which we saw in a number of submissions.)
All in all, a successful week. I hope we
all learned something about
this topic, and of course, we all are here to keep learning - the goal
of the exercises is not to produce a perfect piece of writing, but to
learn more about how to write more effectively. I think the submissions
and critiques this week were very successful at meeting this goal.
(By the way, there was some discussion
about the word limit on the
exercises. I'll just comment quickly that the goal was not to fully
develop or resolve a conflict, but to present it. 300 words is about a
printed page: after reading the first page of a novel or short story, I
expect to have an idea of the underlying conflict, and the character's
motivations. This will be developed in thousands or even hundreds of
thousands of words, of course - but even then, a story is a series of
smaller conflicts within the main goal or conflict, so the ability to
quickly evoke a conflict is an important one.)
Thanks as always to everyone who
participated!
Rhéal Nadeau's wrap-up
Posted on: August 17, 2003
An interesting week as always, with a
broad variety of natural
dangers: snakes and storms and bees and bears and so on.
Looking over the submissions as a whole,
though a couple of things
struck me.
First off, in several submissions, there
was no real conflict
against nature; the conflict was person-versus-person, with nature only
there as a complication. I'm left wondering how far divorced our lives
are from nature, when even in an exercise focused on nature some of us
can do little more than use it as a backdrop...
The same thought came to me as I looked at
how the submissions met
the secondary goal of involving the senses. Some did this very well,
but in others there was no sensory details, or hardly any (and
sometimes "told" - look for the dreaded "is/are" construction...) The
threat was, in many cases, presented as external; pain or the physical
effects of fear or effort were absent or barely hinted at.
(On the other hand, it was amusing to me,
on getting back online for
the first time in two days after the blackout, that the first post I
saw was a submission -- about the blackout. A reminder, I guess, that
even if we too often ignore nature, nature still is out there just
waiting for a breakdown in our infrastructure...)
So to conclude, this was obviously a
challenging exercise for many
of us - and of course, those are often the most useful. I would
recommend that participants take another look at their submissions now,
to see how present nature was, and how much the threat or danger was
shown through immediate sensory details, how much through abstract or
"telling" narrative...
Don't worry, we'll get back to this one
and give it another try!
Rhéal
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